Reflection alchemist and JC essay

Ideas and Content
In what ways does your writing demonstrate appropriate ideas and content? Provide examples.

In what ways could you improve your writing to better express your ideas and enhance content? Be specific.

I think in both essays the information that I needed was there but I was more desriptive in the Alchemist essay. In both essays I discussed each of the characters behaivors. In the Alchemist I talked about Santiago's character traits; loyalty, love, and bravery and gave examples of each. In Julius Caesar I also discussed Brutus's problems; trust, friendship, and patriotism with examples. In the Alchemist I could have done better at explaining my examples and quotes. There were not enough examples for two of my topics; Love, and Bravery I should have added at least one more to each. I should have explained the quote about love in more detail. I also could have clarifed my ideas and explained the examples in more detail, and showed why Brutus did not trust Caesar.
Organization
In what ways does your writing demonstrate appropriate organization? Provide examples.In what ways can you improve your writing to demonstrate superior organization? Be specific.

In both essays I had the basic structure of the essay which is, introduction, body paragraphs, and conclusion. In each I had a thsis statement that made it clear what i was discussing, for the alchemist I used "Santiago does this with three character traits: loyalty, love, and bravery." The paragraphs discussed these topics in that order. In the JC essay the sequnce I wrote the body paragraphs in, was not how I stated in the introduction i should have discussed Brutus's love for Rome before discussing his distrust for Caesar. My ideas were not .always connected to eachother clearly. Like how I talked about Brutus's ancestors then I jumped to ho brutus has no reson to kill Caersar. So next time i'll try to organize my ideas.

Personal Growth

Do you note any improvement between your Alchemist essay and your Julius Caesaressay? Why or why not?

I think that I did better on the AlProxy-Connection: keep-alive
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emits essay because we weren't given time limit as we had with the Caesar essay. It was better because it was more organized and clear to follow. We were able to do drafts and make changes and improvements, it helps when i get feedback to help me do better. Yet I did better in Julius Caeser at including and explaining my quotes. I did better on the sentence structure, punctuation, spelling, and less mistakes in the Alchemist I had more time to do it.

SLR Reflection

Choose one SLR and discuss how you access this SLR when crafting an essay.

In my essay I used thinking creatively to make my alchemist essay I thought I used the quotes

to make my writing sound more believable and hive the reader a better understand my writing. I also made the title to fit with Santiago's problem, to find his destiny.

JC essay

JC essay

“ I’ve no personal reason to spurn at him, it is for the general”.
Brutus plots against Caesar, it’s for the good of the people of Rome, not for any personal business, Brutus is very confused. Brutus is driven by his love for Rome, and his distrust for Caesar character changing if he get’s the power, so Brutus makes the decision to join the conspirators.


Brutus and Caesar are good friends, so Brutus feels that Caesar will change if he gets the crown. The reason Brutus feels this way because; he feels that when Caesar gets into power he will not be sympathetic. “The abuse of greatness is when it disjoins remorse from power”. Brutus has known Caesar for a long time and he is always calculating and never lets his emotions take over. “I have not known when his affections sway’d more than his reason”. When Cassius told Brutus of Flavius and Marrulios death Brutus was more convinced that Caesar would change.

Brutus loves Caesar but he loves Rome more, Brutus believes that Rome should be a republic not under the rule of a king. He could feel this way because; he wants to defend what his ancestors fought for and live up to his name. “ I do fear the people choose Caesar for their king”, Yet Brutus still doesn’t want to kill Caesar. “ I know personal cause to spurn at him, it is for the general”. Brutus has chosen to kill Caesar for the good of Rome not for personal reasons.

The biggest conflict I think Brutus had to face was deciding if he’s going to kill Caesar or not, you could see it affected him a lot. Brutus was not sure if Caesar could be trusted, soon Brutus showed a lot of patriotism for Rome and protected it. Brutus’s character started to change when he had done this he started to become more arrogant. I think Brutus his goal, he said he just wanted to kill Caesar to protect Rome and he did, yet I think he also saved Rome cause Caesar was a very ambitious man, you don’t know what he would have done. I don’t think he did was very noble because Brutus went behind Caesars back and killed him, plus he was one of his best friends and Caesar trusted him and Brutus killed him.

Collage Reflection

Think Creatively!
Identify and discuss some of the creative elements of your collage.

The creative part of my collage was that I tried to combine the pictures and the words so they would give a clear idea what had happened to the children. I showed pictures of injuries and behavior of cruelty towards the children, and I used words to draw attention and explain the children's problems. I arranged the collage into sections like sorrow, pain, slavery, so it is easier for the viewer to understand what was happening. The collage was made clearer by my creativity.

Reason Critically!
How did you use the images and text that you selected to highlight your understanding of the Lost Boy’s situation?

I understood the boys pain, sorrow, and slave conditions that they went through. I used images that showed examples of the experiences they went through. For pain I showed a boy who had gun shot wounds in his cast and leg, then for slavery I showed a soldier making the children support him, then I showed a little boy crying on the floor. I used the words to divide the pictures into sections on the collage. The images I chose to show the different types of pain The Lost Boys suffered.

Communicate Effectively!
Explain how your collage creates awareness for the Lost Boys’ plight.

In my collage I tried to make the viewer aware of the Lost Boys experiences on their journey. I did this by showing images of things they had to worry about like the people with guns, lack of of food, and bullying. Then I used words to explain the pictures, to help the audience understand better. I chose these because, they where the most common experiences The Boys went through.

Live Ethically!
Explain how you think your collage demonstrated empathy and might evoke an emotional response from your viewers and/or incite them to act.

In the collage some of my pictures would evoke an emotional response, the pictures where vivid and show the pain that they went through, especially with the little kids being made to hold up the soldier. From my poster i thought it was clear that i understood the feeling of The Lost Boys, having no dads or someone to depend on to survive. I saw in the images that no boys were helped by anyone.

JC essay

JC essay

Kenyan Johnson

4/3/10

Pink

Mrs. Smith

“ I’ve no personal reason to spurn at him, it is for the general”.

Brutus plots against Caesar, it’s for the good of the people of Rome, not for any personal business, Brutus is very confused. Brutus is driven by his love for Rome, and his distrust for Caesar character changing if he get’s the power, so Brutus makes the decision to join the conspirators.

Brutus and Caesar are good friends, so Brutus feels that Caesar will change if he gets the crown. The reason Brutus feels this way because; he feels that when Caesar gets into power he will not be sympathetic. “The abuse of greatness is when it disjoins remorse from power”. Brutus has known Caesar for a long time and he is always calculating and never lets his emotions take over. “I have not known when his affections sway’d more than his reason”. When Cassius told Brutus of Flavius and Marrulios death Brutus was more convinced that Caesar would change.

Brutus loves Caesar but he loves Rome more, Brutus believes that Rome should be a republic not under the rule of a king. He could feel this way because; he wants to defend what his ancestors fought for and live up to his name. “ I do fear the people choose Caesar for their king”, Yet Brutus still doesn’t want to kill Caesar. “ I know personal cause to spurn at him, it is for the general”. Brutus has chosen to kill Caesar for the good of Rome not for personal reasons.

The Great Journey

‘’They come in search of new thing, but they leave with the same things.’’(Coehlo 8) In the Alchemist, Santiago, the main character, goes on a journey to fulfil his destiny. He has a vision of treasure buried at the pyramids. He meets a priest, Melchizedek, and the priest tells him to go on a quest for his treasure. Santiago listens to the advice, and he goes off on his journey. During his journey, he finds love and does things he never dreamed of doing. On the journey, Santiago meets many people and fulfils his destiny. Santiago does this with three character traits: loyalty, love, and bravery.
Santiago shows his loyalty in many ways. In the book, Santiago is very loyal to the crystal merchant. Santiago shows his loyalty by working for the crystal merchant for a month. “I’d like to build a display case for the crystal,” Santiago tells the crystal merchant. Santiago builds the showcase for the crystal merchant to show that he is loyal to the merchant, and he respects him as a friend and a boss. On his journey, Santiago is also loyal to Fatima. Fatima is a woman of the desert that he falls in love with. He is loyal to her because he always thinks about her and keeps trying to go back to her throughout most of his journey. Santiago is loyal to the alchemist. The alchemist is Santiago’s mentor. Santiago is loyal to the Alchemist by following him and completing the tests the Alchemist gives him. Santiago is very loyal and shows it many times over and over.

’’Love is the falcon’s flight over the sands’’
This quote is talking about how Santiago is in love with Fatima and he asked the desert for help. This is when he is trying to go to the Pyramids. I think in his journey he relies a lot on the alchemist, and asking Fatima for help. He loves her and shows it by telling her she will come back for her. Fatima loves him in the same way but she must stay in the desert as a woman of the desert.
Santiago shows bravery when he goes to the men in the desert and tells them that something is coming; they told him if nothing is happening his life will end. Santiago could have run away and left his destiny but he followed the alchemist words and showed bravery and listened. When the storm finally came, a man appeared on a white horse and wiped out a scimitar he got to keep his life and he continued onto his destiny.
Santiago came from Spain to Africa as a young shepherd to fulfil his destiny. He is loyal, brave, and loving. When he was working for the crystal merchant he did everything and he respected him as a friend and as his boss. He stood up to the alchemist when the storm came did his task and showed bravery. Santiago did not want to leave Fatima when they were in the desert, he wanted to stay with her and love her. If you are loyal and brave, good things will happen to you because you don’t turn your back, you face your fears and you take responsibility. Like Santiago, people who are brave pass the tests of life and can fulfil their destiny.